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    I have now moved from the struggle into the resolution. It’s all down hill from here.  I expect the novel to be 70-80k words. The shortest novel I’ve written yet. But I always seem to add on most of my revisions. I hope to keep it shorter, but we’ll see.

    Now you may ask, hey, how does that compare with other thrillers? Well, here are the lengths of a few of James Patterson’s.

    Title Words
    Honeymoon 65,572
    4th of July 68,000
    Lifeguard 71,634
    Mary, Mary 72,426
    Judge and Jury 74,288
    Doublecross 70,753

    And here are some more by some other authors.

    Author Title Words
    Lee Child Gone Tomorrow 146,000
    Lee Child One Shot 124,000
    Lee Child Killing Floor 162,000
    Lee Child Persuader 164,000
    Michael Connelly The Brass Verdict 145,000
    Ridley Pearson Cut and Run 114,000
    Robert Crais The Watchman 82,000
    Robert Crais Taken 84,000
    Robert Crais The First Rule 76,000
    Robert Crais The Sentry 82,000
    Brad Thor Full Black 117,000
    Brad Thor Athena Project 102,000
    Dean Koontz The Good Guy 93,000
    Dean Koontz The Husband 94,000
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  • Curse now available in audio!

    I’m very happy to announce that Curse is now available in audio format. The other nice thing is that the audio performance of Servant is getting great reviews. Wyndham did a fab job.

    And for those who graciously leave reviews, well, you never know when you’ll become famous. A reader, Jared Smith, left a review of Curse some time ago for the text version. Who knew the publisher would have decided to slap a quote from his review on the cover? Thank you, Jared!

    audiocovercurse

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  • Smith’s grocery and Curse update

    SERVANT has been spotted in the Orem, Pleasant Grove, Salt Lake City, and West Jordan Smith’s stores. It appears we’re still running, folks. Fingers crossed. Please post a comment if you see it in your local Smith’s.

    As for CURSE OF A DARK GOD, I’m moving along. I’m such a slow writer. But I had to yank about 50-70k words from draft 2. Just yank them right out and start over. I’ll give a full report when I’m done, but I’m very excited about this new version. Sugar is becoming a fell-maiden. Talen is becoming more heroic. And I’m just having a great time.

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  • The Curse Honor Roll

    Sometimes, despite our best efforts, mistakes make their ways into the text. Omissions are common. For example, a missing “the” or “of” can be hard to see; your magical mind just fills these tiny words in.

    Some omissions are hilarious. I was editing Raveler a few days ago and ran across a howler that made me laugh and laugh.

    In one scene Shim is angry about the Bone Faces. When he sees their ships, I meant to have him exclaim with some indignation that they were “Coming to plunder under our noses while we’re tied up here.”

    What I wrote was “Coming to plunder our noses while we’re tied up here,” which is a different type of threat altogether.

    And then there are the aaarg! omissions. Like leaving the names of awesome folks who provided valuable input out of your acknowledgements. (Head smack!)

    Yes, I’m guilty of such an idiocy.

    I’m very recently guilty. Like, today guilty.

    The good thing about indie publishing is that I can make changes and upload them immediately. I have already fixed the ebooks. The big paperbacks will be fixed on Monday. But these folks deserve better. To make amends, I’m going to spotlight them here, right now, for all posterity.

    For excellent feedback on the full manuscript, I want to thank Stephen and Liesl Nelson.

    A few years ago, I posted on this website, asking if anyone would be willing to read and report their response to a beginning I wanted to test. These folks stepped up and responded in grand fashion, helping me make the beginning better.

    Adam Teachout
    Alexis Cooper
    Cameron Wilson
    David West
    Eric Allen
    Hyrum Grissom
    Justin Fisher
    Krista Hoeppner Leahy
    Laurel Amberdine
    Lindsey Tolis
    Mark Holt
    Martin Cahill
    Melanie Goldmund
    Merrill Nielson
    Nick Dianatkhah
    Ray Solomon
    Wes Amodt

    All of you rock. And may the Bone Faces never come to plunder your noses.

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  • Servant cover art

    The cover illustration for SERVANT is finished!

    (and there was much rejoicing.)

    yea.

    Actually, there was DANCING. Because I think the final piece rocks. The artist is Victor Minguez. Here are two of his pieces that I really enjoy.

    The first is “Angel.” I love the bright contrast, the face, and the fact that there’s so much rich detail.

    The next is “Champagne Havoc.” Again, a wonderful face, but also an awesome idea (a robot carrying a woman in the palm of its hand), and then the lines and chopper give the whole piece a lot of energy.

    Click here to see other works in his portfolio.

    So we kicked the project off by me sharing the goals I had for the cover and tons of reference on everything from color scheme to character costume. I asked Victor to develop some concepts for an ensemble of Hunger, Sugar, and Talen as well as some for the cave scene towards the end of the book. He came back with these sketches.

    Servant Sketch 1 cave Servant Sketch 2 horse ensemble

    Servant Sketch 3 ensemble Servant Sketch 4 cave

    I liked the first because it would allow us to see the figure’s faces more clearly. And there was a lot of interesting detail with the cave. Look at the roots by the entrance. I also liked the structure. I liked the third because it included Hunger, and Victor was taking Hunger in a new direction. I also thought we could do some neat things with the energy of Sugar on the horse and that long sash. The fourth one, however, just felt right. It had so much potential energy. I was immediately drawn to the body language. And so this is the one we decided to develop.  Then one of my beta art viewers suggested moving closer and putting in more strong diagonals. It was a perfect idea. Victor agreed and came back with this.

     

    Servant WIP 1

    I liked the lines of her stance but wondered if she needed something stronger with her legs. Victor adjusted, but my idea just wasn’t an improvement.

    Servant WIP 2

    So we decided to stick with the previous version. However, this was all too dark. Way too much gray. When looking at things in thumbnail, the cover has to pop. I shared more reference images. And Victor went back and delivered this.

    Servant WIP 3

    Boom! That was exactly what I was looking for. Bright, dynamic. However, we needed a more neutral bit at the top for the title and author’s name. And the brightest spot had to be behind Sugar to draw the eye to her. Here was the next version.

    Servant WIP 4

    At this point I started to dance. This was IT! There was a lot going on here. We had the high contrast I wanted. We had the energy. The wind with the hair and leaves and sash and torch all add kinetic energy. As do all the diagonals. Notice as well the cave details–we have hints at previous habitation, runes, and some interesting contrast with the dark foreground. I had shared a number of N.C. Wyeth and Tim and Greg Hildebrandt pieces as reference, and I think this captured elements of those and gave them a new twist. Note as well the sharp projections on Sugar’s behind. Victor put them in there purely for aesthetic reasons. He had no idea what they were. I loved them. He loved them. They worked. We would just have to make them make sense.

    After a few more iterations, he delivered the final.

    Servant Final

    I think it’s gorgeous. And will advertise the book perfectly. In a few days I will reveal the final cover with title etc. Shortly after that, SERVANT will be available again to please English readers worldwide.

     

     

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2 Comments

  1. Hi John.

    Thanks for the direct link, for some reason I couldn’t find it by searching. Just bought it now and look forward to reading it.

    Cheers,

    David

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